You have potential. Unfortunately, your ability with claymation is much greater than your ability with writing, and to a lesser extent voice acting. Just swearing and having random violence doesn't make a video funny.
Don't give up, but I'd suggest you try collaborating with other writers and voice actors, with you as the animator.
Thank you for the critisism! this claymation was also voiced freely without writing anything down just to see if it felt less static than writing it all down. I agree that just swearing and violence doesn`t make a video funny, and i`m far from giving up because i`m thankful that there are people out there like yourself that give honest feedback! I`m still trying to find my niche for comedy and animation style and see what audience my videos bring and just general feedback. I may actually take your advice about collaborating with other writers and voice actors and me being the animator. I could learn a bit from that instead of it being me mostly
This is the funniest video on Breadit.
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Looks like a good game...
... but impossible to play on my laptop with no mouse. That shouldn't really count against much, because obviously the expectation is that most players WILL have a mouse, but still, on most games like this you can at the very least move the aim and the character simultaneously, whereas in this I could only move or aim, never both (and I had to tap the touchpad to let me aim again after moving)
However, I'm sure it'd be a great game for everyone else. Animation is pretty good, looks like there are a lot of features to vary gameplay (lots of weapons and levels. Obviously I didn't get far enough to unlock any of them, but still) and lots of pick ups, so I'd say it has the look of a very good game.
It was great until...
... I unlocked Master Betty as an advisor. Then it was AWESOME! I can't believe I just played a game where you can make Master Betty kidnap the President! XD
Amazing all round. Little hard to get into at the start, but well worth it.
It was a good game, but...
The music was annoying. I don't mean I didn't like the song, it was good, but everytime you died it suddenly cuts out, and then when you restart you have to hear it from the beginning again. I got pretty tired or hearing that intro, and in all honesty I'd have tried for longer if it wasn't for that.
Also, maybe you could have given the single player a health bar too. Not as big a one, but maybe with 3 hits or something.
A great track. The intro to it was perfect for the background of a short dub video I did; http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6ms1c0qnBsM
So thanks very much for that :)
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